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Topic: Science Fiction
When an outlaw from off-planet is hired to settle disputes between citizens on a future world, unexpected difficulties arise.
I'm the little supposedly 'smart' girl (we're talking national merit scholarship and a Lockheed Martin internship at NASA here...) who kind of never actually finished college (not my fault- there was some car wreck and related health problems, if you must know) and now lives on a ranch in Texas where she writes, living with her dad, step-mother, step-sister, a green-cheeked conure(parrot), 13 mini-donkeys,4 mini-horses (don't you dare call them ponies!) and 3 dogs (you might call 1 mini, but that white one's pretty big).
4 review(s) | Average score: 4
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Review of Breaking Away (part 1)
I have often wondered about what the affect of gravity will be if living in space becomes a reality and how to overcome the growing weak problem. I must admit that I have never thought of growing taller as a possibility and the problems that would bring. A good part 1. Twitter @GeorgesSherman
I couldn't resist using the title ... hehe. I've read the beginning so far, and it seems to be a very solid, well-written start to the story. A few sentences which bring out the "gravity" (hehe again) of the situation would be, for example, "It was an eerie sensation; to be pulled down by the gravity of an entire planet." Sentences like this highlight the fact that this is written in the sci-fi genre, and strike the reader strongly as an indication of what he/she will be reading.
The stewardess' explanations to a naive Parker on what is happening quite nicely takes care of exposition, so I thought that was a good move on the author's part.
This is an intriguing beginning, and I would very much like to find out how things work out, with the job which Parker is undertaking. He's an interesting character, and quite original. Hope you'll be posting more. One quibble: it took me a while to realise that 'Samuel' and 'Parker' are the same person - perhaps it would be better to use one name only, at least at the beginning, when the reader is just being introduced to your characters? Well done, good writing.
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